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Post  adverseaffects on Sun Jan 29, 2012 10:21 pm

I am flesh
and chemicals

Send me reeling, man-boy
there's hundreds like me

playmeplaymeplaymeplayme
set me off like a pinball machine

Biology gave you all the
right phrases

I am made to react to you,
since you are flesh too.

But you get to choose.
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Post  FairyDust on Mon Jan 30, 2012 4:08 am

this is very modern, and I like it, I am not normally a fan of much of the modern poetry, so a pleasant surprise for me, thank you. Smile

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Post  adverseaffects on Mon Jan 30, 2012 5:21 pm

Oh thanks. Smile What do you mean by modern, is it poetry that doesn't attempt to rhyme?
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Post  FairyDust on Mon Jan 30, 2012 5:38 pm

For example Alfred Noyes The Highwayman, or William Butler Yeats and so forth. This would be the genre that I much prefer. It's more of a fantasy idealistic notion of things which is just me down to the ground.


this is an excellent site you can check out, it has a list at the side showing contemporary, early-modern poetry and
Traditional. you can compare the different styles and see what I am talking about. I prefer more of the Traditional poetry genre and the early-modern. www (followed by) .poemtree. (with a) com haha can't link it for 7 days, copy and paste is your friend!

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Post  TheBikloptiKon on Tue Jan 31, 2012 11:22 am

You know, I can't remember the last time I read the word "chemicals" in a poem. I liked it though, the flesh and chemicals, 'twas blunt. Didn't understand "Biology gave you all the
right phrases"... I can only wish biology gave me all the right phrases. Biology gave me visible nervousness and a stutter when presented with the opposite sex... this poem is written to a non-INFP I imagine? Razz
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Post  adverseaffects on Tue Jan 31, 2012 2:21 pm

Yep, he's a smooth operator man-man, he's got it. correct, not an infp haha.
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