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Post  adverseaffects on Thu Feb 23, 2012 7:20 pm

We travel on this path all night
Your heart is glowing out your palms, the only light

Your aching profile shaded by an insipid scarf
I undress me in the dark.

This is the game we will play
do not look do not turn away.

sugar racing in my
this is this is this is

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Post  WordsandSilence on Thu Feb 23, 2012 9:08 pm

I like this. It's mysterious and suggestive and surreal, and I think opaque poems like this are particularly good when short--as is this one.

I particularly like the last stanza, with its unexpected phrase of "sugar racing in my hips," and its uncommon, rhythmic, double repetition of: "This is this is this is it"


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